Tuesday, February 14, 2023

Book Report: Draft No. 4 (95)

6. John McPhee, Draft No. 4: On the Writing Process (2017) (2/14/23)

I explained a couple of weeks ago how I decided on this book. I have now finished it. It was a pleasant read. I can't say I learned much: the most pertinent chapters for me "on the writing process" were the first one, titled "Progression," in which McPhee describes the evolution of his approach to writing a profile of someone of interest, and especially the second, "Structure," in which he describes in detail just how several of his long-form pieces for the New Yorker, where he has been a staff writer for over half a century, are put together, often weaving together thematic elements and chronology, often in an interrupted fashion. 

Subsequent chapters are "Editors & Publisher," containing anecdotes about New Yorker editor William Shawn and others; "Elicitation," about the interview process and note-taking; "Frame of Reference," about assumptions writers make about their readers' cultural knowledge; "Checkpoints," about fact-checking; "Draft No. 4," about when a piece begins to feel as if it has a life of its own, as well as about copy editing and finding just the right word; and "Omission," about knowing what to keep and what to cut.

McPhee uses examples from his own experience—which is star-studded: Richard Burton (and Elizabeth Taylor), Jackie Gleason, General Dwight D. Eisenhower, and many other people known within the publishing world are the focus of various anecdotes, as are the subjects of his wide-ranging nonfiction output. 

Here is a bit from "Draft No. 4"—a note he wrote to his daughter Jenny, then a senior in high school, who was complaining about "the difficulty she was having getting things right the first time, worried by her need to revise."

"Dear Jenny: The way to do a piece of writing is three or four times over, never once. For me, the hardest part comes first, getting something—anything—out in front of me. Sometimes in a nervous frenzy I just fling words as if I were flinging mud at a wall. Blurt out, heave out, babble out something—anything—as a first draft. With that, you have achieved a sort of nucleus. Then, as you work it over and alter it, you begin to shape sentences that score higher with the ear and eye. Edit it again—top to bottom. The chances are that about now you'll be seeing something that you are sort of eager for others to see. And all that takes time. What I have left out is the interstitial time. You finish that first awful blurting, and then you put the thing aside. You get in your car and drive home. On the way, your mind is still knitting at the words. You think of a better way to say something, a good phrase to correct a certain problem. Without the drafted version—if it did not exist—you obviously would not be thinking of things that would improve it. In short, you may be actually writing only two or three hours a day, but your mind, in one way or another, is working on it twenty-four hours a day—yes, while you sleep—but only if some sort of draft or earlier version already exists. Until it exists, writing has not really begun."
     The difference between a common writer and an improviser on a stage (or any performing artist) is that writing can be revised. Actually, the essence of the process is revision. The adulating portrait of the perfect writer who never blots a line comes Express Mail from fairyland.

I am now interested in sniffing out the various McPhee books that sit waiting for me in the garage. There's a good excuse to get in there and do some sorting and culling.


Monday, February 13, 2023

Ellen Bass, poet (94)

I've fallen off the daily wagon, haven't I? A friend on FB just asked when I'd post again, and I muttered something about ceanothus and thrashers (which, yes, I do plan to say something about, one of these days, assuming I remember). And then I scrolled a little farther down FB and saw this poem, and I said to myself, I want to remember this one. And isn't that partly what I use this blog for? So even though I posted another Ellen Bass poem not too long ago, and about more or less the same subject, here's this one, which is stunning, and now I can come back and find it easily when I need a reminder:

If You Knew

What if you knew you'd be the last
to touch someone?
If you were taking tickets, for example,
at the theater, tearing them,
giving back the ragged stubs,
you might take care to touch that palm,
brush your fingertips
along the life line's crease.
 
When a man pulls his wheeled suitcase
too slowly through the airport, when
the car in front of me doesn't signal,
when the clerk at the pharmacy
won't say Thank you, I don't remember
they're going to die.
 
A friend told me she'd been with her aunt.
They'd just had lunch and the waiter,
a young gay man with plum black eyes,
joked as he served the coffee, kissed
her aunt's powdered cheek when they left.
Then they walked half a block and her aunt
dropped dead on the sidewalk.
 
How close does the dragon's spume
have to come? How wide does the crack
in heaven have to split?
What would people look like
if we could see them as they are,
soaked in honey, stung and swollen,
reckless, pinned against time?
 
 
Ironically or not, the image that I found to illustrate this poem is from the obituary of a beloved St. Louis ticket taker, John Thompson. 

And although my numbering is completely irrelevant anymore, for the sake of an orderly mind I'm gonna head to 100 anyway. Maybe I'll try to make up the last few on a daily basis, for old times' sake . . .

Monday, February 6, 2023

Sebastião Salgado, photographer, and Space Shuttle Endeavour (92–93)

On our way this morning from Joshua Tree to LA's San Fernando Valley, we took a detour to Exposition Park, near downtown, and the Science Center for a wonderful exhibition by Brazilian photographer Sebastião Salgado called "Amazônia," a documentation of that 49 percent of Brazil and some of its Indigenous peoples. It features large black-and-white images of aerial landscapes, forest- and riverscapes, rainstorms, often hanging suspended within the large open display space, and people's bodies and faces. A score by French composer Jean-Michel Jarre that incorporates Amazonian sounds—birds, insects, monkeys, frogs, weather, and people's voices—complements the visuals. 

A friend on FB mentioned the show a few weeks ago, and I thought it might be a good reason to come down to LA and visit my brother. Then my friend Kathi mentioned that she was going to be out in Joshua Tree, and my fate was sealed. Three birds, one stone—or at least, one long car drive!

Here is an NPR piece about the exhibition. Here is an interview with Salgado about this project. And here are some photos I shot (there are more in the NPR piece). It was a really stunning show. Well worth the trip down here all on its own.








Afterward, we went and visited the Space Shuttle Endeavour, which is also at the Science Center. We had a great chat with Eddie, who worked on the shuttles out in Palmdale as a hands-on engineer. I took a few more photos:


Thrusters. One external fuel tank remains
in the world: it is huge, with a capacity for
400 tons of liquid hydrogen and liquid oxygen
(it happens to be housed outside the hangar,
so we could be properly blown away by its size);
all the fuel would get consumed in 8 minutes,
and then the tank would be jettisoned and
burn up in the Earth's atmosphere

The underside of the shuttle is covered with 24,300
insulating tiles, each one unique, and ranging in cost
from $20,000 to over $1.6 million per tile

The engine




Here's a photo I took of the Endeavour from Pacific Grove on September 12, 2012, as it was being flown to LA and its new home:

It really was thrilling to watch it fly overhead.

I am calling this post a twofer all on its own. Go ahead, sue me. But now I'm caught up. Aren't I?


Phainopepla (91)

I missed yesterday too. I will stubbornly (and by now meaninglessly) number these posts up to 100, a nice round number, but apparently I'm more or less finished with the daily posts. Because I don't think I have more than one twofer in me, and that's where I'm at already.

In any case, today I'm featuring a sweet little bird that I am always delighted to see out in the desert, Phainopepla nitens. This year I got lucky with the timing of my visit to Joshua Tree, because of what they eat. "Phainopeplas have digestive tracts specialized for eating mistletoe fruit. These berries are low in nutrients, so the birds have to consume lots of them. The berries spend only about 12 minutes in a Phainopepla’s intestine, and the birds may eat 1,100 berries in a day." And it turns out the mistletoe, living on mesquite, acacia, palo verde, and ironwood in the sandy washes here, fruits nicely during the winter months. They also eat other berries, as well as insects.

This morning I saw one flitting about, then perching atop a woody bush and calling. (In the Cornell list of Phainopepla sounds, what I heard was more or less like the first "call," a sweet little cheep. Though they also mimic the sounds of other birds.) When he flew, I caught the flash of white. 

The name Phainopepla is from the Greek, meaning 'shining robe'. They are in the silky-flycatcher family, Ptilogonatidae, of which there are only four species in three genera, all but this one living in Mexico to Central America. They are not related to flycatchers; their nearest common ancestors are the waxwings (which I wrote about here).

I feel blessed to have been able to commune with one this morning as the sun rose. What a great start to the day.


Saturday, February 4, 2023

Joshua Tree (90)

I missed yesterday, so today will be a twofer. I missed yesterday because I spent much of the day driving—seven hours to Joshua Tree, heading ever more eastward (which always surprises me), via Bakersfield, Tehachapi, and Barstow. 

Joshua Tree because one of my best friends, Kathi, is out visiting from Massachusetts, and collectively her family owns several places in JT. So twelve of us are convening out here: one of Kathi's brothers, a couple of nephews, a cousin, spouses, and two of Kathi's oldest friends from high school. (I met Kathi just after college.) Most of us are staying at her cousin Vandy's house—party central. Right now, 10 a.m., the Beatles are playing and scrambled eggs are being cooked. Soon we'll head to the farmers market to buy provisions for the evening meal. There will be at least one hike. And plenty of conversation, catching up, and, no doubt, music making (several of those gathered are musicians).

This morning I wandered around in the desert near the house, and I made this collage. So: installment #1. We'll see what I spot for #2. Something is sure to catch my eye. (Click to see larger.)



Thursday, February 2, 2023

Frog Pond Wetland Preserve (89)

The other day, a day after storms blew through, we took our regular walk at the local Frog Pond. I really enjoyed the puffy clouds in the brilliant blue sky, and the saturation of the winter colors, and the reflections. I took some photos.

See the ducks?








Wednesday, February 1, 2023

Los Padres Dam (88)

I went out with nine others today to do some trail work on the Big Pines Trail, near Los Padres Dam in the Carmel River watershed. We cleared some twenty trees from the trail after the recent big rains. It was the first time I'd been out in that area in a few years, ever since a serious landslide obliterated the former access road. 

There used to be a road through the middle of that.

A new bypass trail has been built that now goes up and over, thanks to a few intrepid wilderness rangers. It's a bit of a slog, but it's safe.

I took some photos, which is what I offer here today. Working hard to clear some trail always opens and settles my mind. Being out with the trees and birds and clear skies, ditto. Sometimes there are newts, but not today; sometimes there are ticks, but thankfully, again not today. 

These first few photos are from this morning, of the dam and its spillway, and the reservoir. (Click to see the photos large.)




A couple things I noticed along the way.


And the afternoon return.

Notice how many of the logs that clogged the shores in the
morning are gone. I do not know why this happened.


The spillway.

Wilderness rangers returning wearily to their vehicles.

And our happy, if weary, crew: